Screenplay rewrite, 2

OVER BLACK
We hear dramatic music (http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=3tYhrPeHmY0), We start the track at 37 seconds as this part is fading in  so will work well with the fade in of the titles and credits.  It also gives enough time for the music  to pick up at 48 seconds and add more atmosphere to the start.

This music is suitable for our opening as we are following conventions and challenging them too, so in this piece the beat drops and changes from orchestral to a modern style beat. We want the film to make the audience feel anxious and hooked from the start, also so they can easily see the twist on the conventions (of which we did) that are associated with the gangster genre. This helps represent what we want the audience to feel as we are adding a new twist to a respected genre.

BLACK FRAME
TITLE APPEARS WHITE TEXT (FADES IN)

SEX, MONEY, MURDER

TITLE FADES OUT

STAYS ON BLACK

BLACK AND WHITE ECU of radio speaker, 

REVERSE CREEP picture in BLACK AND WHITE

MUSIC FADES OUT TO SILENCE

match on action of finger ringing doorbell

ECU of hand turning off radio

SILENT SLOW MO FLASHES OF MARIA AND VENDILINI WALKING UPSTAIRS AND INTO ROOM, CLOSING DOOR BEHIND THEM. (BLACK AND WHITE)



Maria (the soon to be seductive killer of many notorious gangsters) will be wearing long black evening wear to seem very seductive to make it easier to attract her targets,this dress can also easily conceal a small weapon.
Vendilini will be wearing an tucked shirt unbuttoned with no tie and trousers as he has just finished work and was going to his "partner's" house to relieve stress after a hard day at work. 


FREEZE FRAME OF DOOR



Maria emerges, hair ruffled and make up smudged blood on hands.
(Over the shoulder see face in mirror) Maria looks in mirror and retouches make up.


(extended time spent on scene above)

match on action of knock at door

CUTS TO;

Maria answers front door to another man, she smiles seductively and looks into his eyes, they then kiss passionately.

CUT TO;

CU of VENDILINI BREATHING HEAVILY IN A POOL OF HIS OWN BLOOD

CUTS TO;

FADES TO BLACK AND CREDITS ROLE IN WHITE TEXT, TITLE RE APPEARS